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Almost - Hazeleyedpanda by ~hazeleyedpanda:iconhazeleyedpanda:



When she\'s sitting there all alone
pretending to find enjoyment
in staring at the clouds.
When the whole world
seems to have forgotten
to remember her,
Forgotten to love her.
She\'s almost invisible.
When she sits there
basking in all her charm.
She makes you smile
and she almost
gives you this unshakable comfort.
When she walks away from you
and you wish she were
still beside you.
You\'re almost in love with her.
When she silently screams in the night
and when she cries so loud
that no one hears her.
When all she needs
is someone to hold her.
She\'s almost dying.
When she sits there
carelessly laughing
at your petty jokes
there\'s almost a spark in her eyes.
And when she\'s having
the best day she\'s had for sometime
in that jaded life
she calls her own,
She\'s almost happy.
When it rains outside
and she\'s running through it
as if she loves the world.
She\'s not caring about you.
She\'s not caring about the past.
She\'s not caring about tomorrow.
And when that rain glides through her hair
and wets her shivering cheeks,
She\'s almost dancing.
When she puts her makeup on
pale tints of pink light up her cheeks.
And when she wears her hair
sweetly framed around her face
She\'s almost beautiful.
©2003-2010 ~hazeleyedpanda
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:icontimrkey:
and she almost
gives you this unshakable comfort.

and

She's almost beautiful.

omg heather, +fav +fav +fav +fav

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More than sad it makes you mad, to know somebody knows theres a lying in your silence...

~timrkey ~laurlooo ~ hazeleyedpanda ~ beautybhindthelenz ~wyeth ~ nostalgicstar
:iconlaurlooo:
Wow heather, I love this. I can relate a lot. Sounds a like a song Vanessa Carlton would write. Good job, you're writing is getting a lot better Heart

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m.i.l.k.s.h.a.k.e.s. <3
:iconsimplicated:
this is amazing. i'm breathless and speechless.

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[cori]
:iconsecretgal13au:
wow this is a really good [link] definately relates to one of my friends.good job! :-) (Smile)
:iconbeautybhindthelenz:
When it rains outside
and she's running through it
as if she loves the world.
She's not caring about you.
She's not caring about the past.
She's not caring about tomorrow.
And when that rain glides through her hair
and wets her shivering cheeks,
She's almost dancing.


AND

And when she wears her hair
sweetly framed around her face
She's almost beautiful.

:D (Big Grin) :D (Big Grin) :D (Big Grin) :D (Big Grin) :D (Big Grin) :D (Big Grin) :D (Big Grin) :D (Big Grin) :D (Big Grin) I LOVE IT!!

its wonderful!
:iconladyindistress:
*sigh* i love it muchly.

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*keep talking, those stars will listen*

my brother-i can't wait to get to school!
me- WHAT?!
my brother- so i can start can't waiting to get out of it!
me- :rofl:
:icondepressed-angel:
I do love this, I really really do. When I finished reading this *Your last line was amazing*, it kind of put me in this more relaxed, carefree mood, and I believe you have written this beautifully. Like *simplicated stated, "breathless" and "speechless" very much suit this poem, and not only this, but all your work. I hope to be seeing more from you.:) (Smile)

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(x(.:.Depressed-Angel.:.)x)

::How can I take your hand when you can't promise happy endings?*//
_Amber Pacific_
:iconsolacingbreath:
The flow of this was great. The ONLY thing that bugged me was your punctuation. You left sentence fragments as a sentence...that takes away from the flow of things. Otherwise, this was really great. It's something that people can really relate to-- I know I can.

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My candle burns at both ends
Until your sweet breath
blows it out.
And I am saved by the air of your goodness.

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:iconmrfeelnothing:
I know I don't know you, but I think you're beautiful.
+fav

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